Know your Brackets & How to Use Them
What are Brackets?
There are a few symbols that can technically be considered brackets, which are used as punctuation marks. Written English has four types of brackets and each pair of marks has its own usage rules. Here are a few to consider.
Round Brackets ( )
Round brackets ( ), also known as parentheses, especially in American English, are the most commonly used in written English. A pair of round brackets is used when a writer wants to add information to a sentence that will give greater detail to the information presented, but which is not essential to the meaning of the sentence.
- The round brackets separate off the information that isn’t essential; if you remove the bracketed words the sentence still makes sense.
Example: Angela agreed (after a quick call) that she would attend the party.
- Round brackets can also be used to add a comment by the person writing.
Example: They were hoping to depart (even though the train was delayed).
In this case, the bracketed information is not part of the main subject of the sentence.
Example: The mother (and her children) arrived for the appointment.
- Short translations in unquoted text can be placed in round brackets.
Example: Her knowledge of French is limited to merci (thank you) and au revoir (goodbye).
- In some works, a person’s year of birth and year of death are provided in round brackets when the person is first mentioned.
Example: Galileo Galilei (1564-642) was an Italian polymath.
Note: Words placed in round brackets can often be set off with commas instead, and in some cases, by em-dashes.
Square Brackets [ ]
Square brackets [ ] are known simply as brackets in American English, and in some instances as box brackets. They are extremely useful to writers and editors, serving a range of purposes. The most popular of which is to enclose explanatory matter that one adds in editing the work of another writer. The square brackets indicate that an alteration has been made in the original text.
- Square brackets enclose words added by someone other than the original writer or speaker. This is usually done to clarify a point or meaning. The words that are being added to an original quote are always placed within square brackets, and not round brackets (parentheses). This tells your readers exactly how you have altered the original.
Example:
Original: He said, “I removed their equipment from the farm.”
Amended: He said, “I removed their [obsolete] equipment from the farm.”
Example: Dr Gordon [the cardiologist] was not in attendance.
- In quoting a passage in a written piece, it is often necessary to insert information that was provided elsewhere in the original text.
Example: I have a good idea what she [J Austen] had in mind, but societal values were not as accommodating then.
- If it’s necessary to change the original capitalisation of a word or provide a word in order to make a quotation fit grammatically into the new text, square brackets are used.
Example:
Original: Mary was outrageous, the belle of every ball.
Quoted form: According to the society columnist, “[She] was outrageous, the belle of every ball.”
- Use square brackets as brackets within brackets. This is often seen with bibliographic references. Example: (For more on the topic, see Longmans Companion to English Literature [2012].)
- If the word in a quotation is archaic, colloquial or used in a sense that may not be familiar to readers, the editor may provide an explanation in square brackets.
Example: John prefers to wear undergruts [underpants] depicting cartoon characters.
- Square brackets are also used for translations in quoted text.
- Square brackets are used to enclose ‘sic’ and italicise it. The Latin term ‘sic’ is used to indicate that something written is intentionally left in the original form, which may be incorrect factually or in terms of spelling.
Example: The journalist wrote, “Their [sic] were seven hostages.”
- Square brackets can be used to show the pronunciation of a word.
Example: She mispronounced ‘ambience’ [ahm-b’enz].
Curly Brackets { }
Curly brackets { }, or (curly) braces in American English, have limited usage in written English, mostly being used for poetry or music. They are used extensively in mathematics, physics and coding.
- They are used when a writer wanted to create a list of items that are all equal choices.
Example: The gardening instructor said, “Gather your equipment {spade, fork, shovel, knife, shears} and follow me.”
- They are also used in writing or printing for the purpose of uniting together two or more lines, words, staves of music, etc.
This punctation mark is not used much in ‘everyday’ writing or ‘normal’ text but does appear in technical and scientific papers and textbooks, requiring specialised writing, editing and proofreading skills.
Angle[d] Brackets < >
Angle(d) brackets < >, also known as (left and right) chevrons or carets, have very limited use in writing but are used in copy editing and in other technical applications (such as mathematics and coding).
The most common use for angled brackets is for placing URLs, email addresses and images into text. In copy editing they are used to set off highlighted material, as place markers, and to indicate certain instruction to the book designer.
Final Thoughts
- If brackets (round or square) are used at the end of a sentence, the full stop should be placed outside, as the final punctuation.
Example: John and his wife decided to retire to the West Coast (where their children live).
- When content within brackets (round or square) occurs in the middle of a larger sentence, the surrounding punctuation should be placed outside the brackets, exactly as it would be if the bracketed content were not there.
Example: We confirmed his graduation (Harvard, class of 2010), but his CV needs scrutiny.
- Note that all bracket types serve different purposes in mathematics, physics and computer coding.
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Colons: How to Use Them Correctly
If you want your written English to be more effective and elegant, you should use the colon and semicolon correctly. While they may appear to be similar, they have very different uses. In brief, the colon is used to provide a pause before introducing related information, while the semicolon is merely a break in a sentence that is stronger than a comma but not as final as a full stop
- Do not use a colon in a complete sentence after phrases such as ‘including’, ‘such as’, and ‘for example’. Phrases like these already indicate to the reader that a list of examples will follow, there is no need to introduce them with a colon; it would be redundant.
Incorrect: New Zealand has many types of fruit, such as: apples, nashi pears and grapes. Correct: Many birds are found in New Zealand including kiwi, tui, weka and kea.
- Do not use a colon after a preposition (such as ‘in’), or a verb, that introduces a list.
Incorrect: The medical student excelled in: surgery, diagnostics and trauma. Correct: The new law student excelled in surgery, diagnostics and trauma.
- Do use a colon to introduce an item or a series of items, or provide an explanation, but only if its use is not contrary to rules 1 and 2 above.
Do not capitalise the first item after the colon in a list (unless it’s a proper noun). Correct Use to Introduce a List: The store carried all the items the new teacher needed: pens, paper, printer toner and folders. Correct Use as an Explanatory Tool: The cafeteria served the type of food most preferred by students: noodles.
- A colon instead of a semicolon may be used between independent clauses when the second sentence explains, illustrates, paraphrases, or expands on the first sentence.
Correct: He got what he worked for: he really earned his retirement.
- If the material following the colon is a dependent clause or phrase, do not capitalise the first word (unless it’s a proper noun).
Correct: He got what he worked for: a happy retirement.
- Do use a colon when restating an idea. If the material following the colon constitutes a full sentence, you can choose to capitalise the first word or not. Some writers and editors feel that capitalising a complete sentence after a colon is always advisable. Others advise against it.
Correct: Remember the old adage: Pretty is as pretty does.
- When two or more complete sentences follow a colon, capitalise the first word following the colon.
- Also, capitalise the first word of a complete or full-sentence quotation that follows a colon.
Correct: Mother announced to all present: “Mary is getting married.” Correct: The teacher gave us three rules to follow: Be on time. Work hard. Share your knowledge.
- The colon can be used to emphasise a phrase or single word at the end of a sentence. An em-dash can be used for the same purpose.
Correct: After three weeks of deliberation, the jury finally reached a verdict: guilty.
Voice, Perspective & Tone in your Writing
Your Voice
A writer’s voice includes their style of writing, their perspective and their tone in writing. Voice is your personality expressed in writing, while tone reflects your attitude in a piece of writing. It’s what makes your writing ‘sound’ authentic to your reader. Your voice affects how you tell the story or cover the subject matter of your literary work, and how you make a reader feel about it. Consequently, it impacts the way they experience your story or the impression they form about the topic of your written piece.
Your Style
Your style is how you choose to tell a story. It’s about the mechanics of your writing ‒ the individual word choices, the structure of sentences, use of punctuation, choice of formatting, and whether your writing is formal or informal, concise or detailed, objective (factual) or subjective (opinionated) ‒ to mention but a few.
Your Perspective
Every writer has a perspective. Perspective is not to be confused with the story’s point of view or method of narration (i.e. first person, third person). While point of view focuses on ‘who’ is telling the story ‒ who is speaking (the narrator), perspective is how you choose to view and relay what’s happening in the story ‒ how the narrator perceives the events or circumstances.
Perspective is unique to you. Each character in your story can be involved in the same event, but each will come away with a unique set of experiences or observations. Perspective is an essential component of your voice because it determines what you bring forward in the story.
Your Tone
Your tone is your attitude or feeling about the story you’re writing or the subject matter you are covering as well as your attitude or feeling towards the reader. The tone relates to the mood in a piece of writing and it may remain constant or fluctuate throughout the work. It may vary in degree of intensity or shift entirely at some point.
Your tone can be serious, dark, funny, sardonic, ironic, wistful, formal, cheerful, melancholy ‒ the whole range of human emotions. Tone serves to convey a story the way that you want it to be experienced; it gives the reader cues on how to feel about the subject matter or what’s happening in the story.
Your word choice, sentence structure, imagery, writing mechanics (such as punctuation and word styling), and how you feel about what’s happening meld to create a tone throughout your work.
Final Thoughts
Over time, your natural style will develop, as will your writer’s voice. As you read the literary works of other writers, you’ll be influenced by their styles as well. But, of course, for your style and voice to develop and fully emerge, you have to write and write and keep on writing.
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Writing a Query or Covering Letter to a Literary Agent
What is a Query or Covering Letter?
A query or covering letter [1] is your entry point to the traditional publishing world. In most cases, publishing houses do not accept unsolicited manuscripts or, at least, any manuscripts not endorsed and represented by an agent, especially so for the Big Five publishers.
The query letter is a one-page note asking a literary agent if they’re interested in representing your book ‒ and getting them excited about it. Securing an agent for your manuscript is the first step in your publishing journey if you’re going along the traditional publishing route. Agents may receive hundreds of queries a month, and they might only sign four or five authors per year. This means your query letter is a significant document.
The Challenge
A query letter is about making a good impression and generating interest. The goal is to sell your story, and then yourself. The challenge is to condense the essence of your entire book into approximately 300 to 400 words at most. Keep the letter short and to the point. It’s recommended that you write no more than a page.
The Format
There’s no standard format that all authors use for their letters. However, a query is a business document and as such should look like a formal one-page business letter.
Set the margins to 2.54 cm (one inch) an all sides. Block format the text, left-justify and use double-space between paragraphs.
Don’t handwrite the query letter. Type it on white paper using a black, 12-point standard font, like Times New Roman, Arial or Courier, nothing unusual, exotic or flouncy.
Format with your address, email and telephone number at the top of the page, right justified. Next, type the agent or publisher’s address, this time left justified.
Add the date below that on a separate line.
Use a personalised greeting where you acknowledge the agent by name.
The Structure
Keep the body of your query letter from three to five paragraphs.
Paragraph One:
Start with the reason why you’ve written the letter: it’s topic and purpose. Mention your book’s title (in italics or in quotation marks), genre, word count and target audience. The word count is an essential piece of information. Provide a very brief one-sentence summary of the book and why you wrote it.
This paragraph is your opportunity to hook the literary agent and make them pay attention. Your hook should show them how your book is different from the thousands of others in your genre. If you’ve published before, you may want to mention that upfront.
Share any connection you have with the agent or add a referral from an established author or a publishing insider. Personalise the letter to the agent by referencing their existing clients or quoting something the agent has written or said in public.
Paragraphs Two and Three:
Now that you’ve hooked the agent, it’s time to summarise your story. Provide a somewhat longer introduction to the book. (Do not include too many details here; they belong in the synopsis. [2]) You may need more than one paragraph for this. Explain what your book is about and why a reader will feel compelled to read it.
The ‘what’ element is about information: discuss your settings, your premise, your main characters (no more than three or four) and outline the plot. Show the conflict of the story as much as possible.
The ‘why’ element is about the emotional themes, tensions and atmosphere in the story. Agents want to see the connections between characters, their relationships, etc. Don’t give away the entire plot, though. Leave the agent wanting more and eager to learn about the outcome.
Paragraph Four:
Add your biographic information, but make sure it’s relevant to writing. Briefly indicate why you are uniquely qualified to write the book and what separates you from other authors; it’s especially important if you’ve written non-fiction.
Mention any critical recognition or awards you’ve received for your previous work. Refer to your writing credentials (e.g. education, courses and conferences) and related writing experience, i.e. your writing history. Detail the names of authors with whom you may have studied. This is a good tactic to use if you don’t have many publishing credits.
If you are writing a series, you should say so. Agents will like the fact that you recognise the series potential of your work and that you are committed to taking the steps needed to develop it.
Paragraph Five:
Write the closing statements. Tell the agent why you have chosen to send the query letter to them. Mention what drew you to them and why you think you would be a good fit as one of their clients. Be as specific as possible.
Indicate that you have understood the submission guidelines and, if you like, list what you have attached in the submission package (given you’re doing so by email). Thank the agent for their time and consideration. Sign off with a simple closing, such as Sincerely, Cordially, Warmly, etc.
What you should do when writing a Query Letter
Use short paragraphs and short sentences, when possible. Make it easy for the agent to read your letter by writing clearly and concisely.
Your query letter should be written in a similar tone to your narrative. Write it so that it embodies the spirit of your book.
Make sure that your hook and summary make up around half of your query letter.
Your query letter must be error-free and written in a focused, professional and realistic style. Show the agent that you can write well.
You can list possible readers demographics, e.g. “Readers of Stephen King and Dean Koontz will be drawn to my story.”
Research agents so you can personalise your query. Show the agent that you put in the time and have targeted them in your search for the right agent for your book.
Try to indicate why you’re pitching your book to that specific agent. Whether the agent represents other authors you love or the same genre as your book, it helps if your book is a good fit with their area of interest.
Follow submission guidelines. Be careful about reading agents’ individual guidelines; they vary. Their specific requirements will always be spelt out for you at their websites.
Address each specific agent by name if possible. Using a “to whom it may concern” address is unprofessional and careless.
Above all, before you even write a query letter, it’s essential to have a completed and polished manuscript or a non-fiction book proposal with 30 to 50 polished sample pages.
Mention that your book has been reviewed by a professional editor and copy editor. Agents love that; it makes you appear more serious about your writing and it adds more weight to your query letter.
What you should not do when writing a Query Letter
Don’t go beyond one page; it’s presumptuous and unprofessional.
Don’t oversell your book or sound arrogant; it’s rude and agents don’t appreciate the attitude.
Don’t self-deprecate or be overly modest, either. If you don’t believe in you book, why should the agent?
Don’t forget to include your SASE (self-addressed, stamped envelope), unless you’re emailing your query and expecting an email response
Don’t turn your bio into a memoir. Only discuss information that is directly relevant to the novel you’re pitching.
Final Thoughts
Aside from the near constant rejection writers face (persevere!), crafting the perfect query letter is one of the hardest parts of trying to get published. Writing it might feel even more daunting than authoring your novel, but it doesn’t need to be. Use guidelines in this post to get your query letter noticed by a busy literary agent and get closer to achieving your publishing goals.
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[1] In New Zealand, Australia and the UK, authors, publishers and literary agents tend to use the term ‘covering letter’, whereas in the USA and Canada, its commonly referred to as a ‘query letter’. It is the same thing.
[2] The synopsis is a separate document that forms part of your submission package. It is a short summary of your story in its entirety (including the ending and any twists) that follows the same broad structure as your novel. It is usually about 500 to 800 words in length.
Guidelines for Writing a Memoir People want to Read
Although based on actual events, memoir is more like fiction than non-fiction. To be publishable, a memoir must make use of fiction techniques that pull the reader along and elicit an emotional response. A good memoir begins with the author’s perspective but doesn’t end there. It leaves the reader with a decision to make or an action to take.
If you are not a celebrity, you need to be able to write extremely well in order to place a memoir with a publisher. Memoirs can be very complex pieces of work.
Memoir vs. Autobiography
First-person accounts of people’s lives are often categorised into two main genres: autobiography and memoir. An autobiography covers the trajectory of an entire life, while a memoir is just one story from that life.
An autobiography spans one’s entire life; it’s much like a ‘historical document’ and is more formal than a memoir because it strives for factual accuracy. Autobiographies often tell stories close to or exactly how they happened, which means they often feature straightforward language and chronological narration. Autobiographies usually cover multiple themes. There’s not just one life lesson learned, but many; not just one significant event covered, but several.
A memoir usually revolves around one or few significant memories; it’s rarely all-encompassing. Where autobiographies emphasise facts, memoirs focus on personal experience, intimacy and emotional truth. These most often concern a specific time, or an event, or series of events, or a choice that changed the course of a person’s life, all of which are tied together with one theme. A memoir is heavily thematic, and this overriding subject is often the moral, i.e. the lesson learned, or a significant transformation of self (e.g. finding out you’re adopted, or losing a leg to a shark attack), as examples.
The requirement for a strong autobiography is a life that’s out of the ordinary in some way, whereas a memoir can be about an ordinary existence told with profound insight; it doesn’t depend on having lived a traumatic, eventful or dramatic life.
Choose a theme
The starting point for writing memoir is to pick a theme, occasionally more than one, from your life that you feel is worth writing about. A theme is a universal idea we all grapple with, something anyone can understand; it answers the question, “What is this memoir about?” Having a theme not only helps your reader connect to your work, but also makes the writing process much easier.
What you shouldn’t do when writing a memoir is tell a bunch of stories tentatively connected in some way. A memoir is more than that. Good narrative non-fiction always connects the reader to a deeper truth. Use your theme to tie events together and include only those stories that illustrate the theme.
Narrow your focus and develop a plot line
Identify one or perhaps a few events in your life to develop the plot line, the story you tell to illustrate the theme, the ‘big universal thing’ your story is about. ‘You’, as the subject, is not what the story is about. The story is about something universal and you are its illustration.
Of course, our lives are not comprised of solitary, isolated bundles of experience. Rather, the repercussions of our life choices and events all form threads which bind together to create experience. But it is necessary to select one or a core few to focus the plot around.
According to highly regarded academic, teacher and writer William Zinsser: “My final [reducing] advice can be summed up in two words: think small. Don’t rummage around in your past — or your family’s past — to find episodes that you think are ‘important’ enough to be worthy of including in your memoir. Look for small self-contained incidents that are still vivid in your memory. If you still remember them it’s because they contain a universal truth that your readers will recognize from their own life.” [1]
Establish a story arc. The best way to accomplish that in a memoir is by showing how you, the main character, grew and changed as a person. Even though it’s a story about your life, it still has to have some of the elements and structure of fiction to make it compelling. You need character development, a compelling struggle and a resolution.
Your memoir is not all about ‘you’
Your memoir should focus more on a story than simply your own subjective experience. It should be about the lesson you’ve learned and your insights that can be share with others. Readers will become bored hearing only about you; it’s too egotistical. But don’t ram your lessons down their throat, either; be subtle.
A memoir is about something bigger than you. It’s about a part of life we can all connect to. Your story’s details are conveyed in such a way that readers can enjoy the universal elements within your own personal experience.
Don’t begin at the beginning
It’s recommended that you start your memoir from the end or at the point of highest drama. Don’t tell your story chronologically; that’s too predictable. And don’t include every detail of your life. Readers become impatient with memoirs that meander through a backstory to get to the interesting parts. Some memoirists find it helpful to start from the end of their story first. Write about how you got to where you are.
Or, begin your memoir with an incident that is powerful and makes an impact. Even if this means beginning in the middle of the story, you can retell events out of chronological order. Perhaps start with the major turning point, and cycle back to explain how you came to that point later, or simply progress from this point to the resolution.
Be honest and fair
Vanity and self-obsession can ruin your memoir. Don’t embellish try to make yourself look better or appear more interesting, or ignore your own flaws and faults, or fabricate to justify your past. Doing so makes your memoir sound biased or even self-pitying. Memoir demands that you write about what really happened and what you’ve learned. It’s about retrospection, trying to figure things out, about exploring the truth as seen through your eyes.
The value of your story is in its raw and vulnerable honesty. It’s okay to be human and it’s required when writing a memoir. Readers will sense when you’re lying anyway. Your memoir should strive for your personal emotional truths, and it should feel far more personal that an autobiography.
What to keep and what to cut
Carefully choose what to leave in your memoir and what to cut. The most important elements to keep are any concerning transformation, growth or transcendence. It’s a minimum requirement of the genre. Don’t confuse transcendence in this context with a religious or spiritual experience: it’s more about progressing, even evolving.
It is important to understand the turning points (i.e. the events which have inspired the memoir) which are significant to the story and require deep examination to succinctly convey their emotional significance.
Make your book episodic, describing in detail events that are of interest or highly poignant to your story. Cut all meaningless details and the mundane (unless it is an intrinsic part of building the scene) which have no relation to your overarching theme. What this means is that at times you may have to skip forward months or even years in your narrative to deliver only the aspects which are relevant to the wider message you want to convey to your readers. A memoir can have a short or long timespan. The events could happen in days or over a lifetime, but the focus must remain on those events and be tied to the theme.
Have a target audience
Not everyone will enjoy or be drawn to your memoir, and that’s understood. You’re not trying to reach all readers, only those who relate to or benefit from your story. Write for that target audience as if you’re speaking directly to them. Memoir readers are not interested in rambling, self-indulgent pieces. Memoir readers tend to prefer:
- A sympathetic main character
- Vividly depicted scenes
- Emotional tension
- Increasing sense of drama/conflict
- A satisfying ending
They like evocative content that provide a glimpse into someone else’s life. They want writing that enlightens them on experiences which they may not have had, and with a moral, a lesson or a message attached.
Don’t use real names
Whenever possible, use a pseudonym rather than the real name of a character in your memoir. Also avoid sharing easily identifiable information about the ‘characters’ you mention. This is the one time when it’s better to blur the truth. Using real names can get you in a lot of trouble and become a legal wrangle. You could face a defamation lawsuit even if you’re telling the truth. Just as serious, you could damage close relationships by your portrayal of them.
Editing is essential
Most of us don’t have the objectivity or, perhaps, the skill needed to strip away parts of our story to find the true turning point or the core of our truth. Even though you have distance from the events in your memoir, it’s still a part of your experience.
That’s where an editor plays a role. Because memoirs are so personal, you need a fresh, impartial perspective to help you create a stronger narrative. I can help you fine-tune your memoir ‒ developing a theme, selecting life events, learning writing technique and so forth. Contact me to discuss your project. M: +64 29 1230 158 and email: renellj@proofperfect.co.nz
Final Thoughts
Keep in mind that a memoir doesn’t necessarily need to be strictly about your own life. It can also be about a person other than the writer, or about a given place, or it can be a ‘hybrid memoir’ combining a personal story with other non-fiction subject areas; it can cross genres, too.
Renowned authors Jeanette Winterson and Helen Macdonald state that a memoir does have to ‘fit the genre’ ‒ it can cover more than one genre if the writer is skilled. Nor does a memoir have to “conform to chronological order; both [authors’] books whip sometimes furiously from past to present, in an order set by a progression of emotions and themes, not constrained by a linear idea of time”. [2]
[1] ‘How to Write a Memoir’ by William Zinsser, The American Scholar, 12 May 2015: https://theamericanscholar.org/how-to-write-a-memoir/#.XcEicDMzYT5
[2] ‘How to write a memoir: Jeanette Winterson and Helen Macdonald’, by Alex Clark and Sian Cain, The Guardian: 4 June 2015: https://www.theguardian.com/books/2015/jun/04/how-to-write-a-memoir-jeanette-winterson-and-helen-macdonald
What does Tone mean in your Writing?
What is tone?
Tone is an aspect of writing style that refers to the author’s attitude or approach toward the reader and the subject matter or central theme in the literary work. It is expressed through the author’s writing and is a powerful tool that a capable author can wield to great effect.
To be more precise: Tone in fiction is the attitude of the narrator or viewpoint character toward the theme, story events and other characters. In non-fiction, tone is the author’s attitude and approach toward the subject matter and the reader.
Note that literary tone and literary mood are not the same, although they are closely associated. Tone has to do with the way the author approaches the theme or subject matter, whereas mood is how the writing makes the reader feel.
In The Oxford Essential Guide to Writing (originally published in 2000), Thomas Kane describes it as a “web of feelings stretched throughout the essay”. Kane also says: “Tone … is unavoidable. You imply it in the words you select and in how you arrange them.” In brief, tone is the author’s feelings on their subject as represented by the text.
All writing has a sense of tone, and since tone describes an attitude, adjectives are used to describe tone. The tone of the writing may be formal, informal, serious, humorous, sarcastic, cynical, sincere, melancholy, sad, cheerful, playful, angry and so forth — the whole range of human emotions. Writing’s tone is akin to a speaker’s tone: when we speak, we can say one sentence in a number of ways to produce different meanings; so too for writing. The author’s intentions, emotions, and personal ideas about the theme or subject matter reveal themselves in the tone of their writing.
Consider the following example of tone:
The last stanza of The Road Not Taken, a poem by Robert Frost.
I shall be telling this with a sigh
Somewhere ages and ages hence:
Two roads diverged in a wood, and I,
I took the one less traveled by,
And that has made all the difference.
Frost tells us about his past with a ‘sigh’, giving the lines an unhappy, melancholy tone. This tone suggests that the speaker in the poem had to make a difficult choice and is reconciled, even at peace, with the decision he made.
How tone operates in fiction
The tone may remain constant throughout the written piece, or it may at times vary in degree of intensity, or it may perhaps shift entirely at some point, but when the written piece is viewed as a whole, the overall tone should be purposeful and consistent.
While tone can change over the course of the story ‒ since the viewpoint character/narrator grows or their perspective changes, or the plot becomes more complicated or dramatic, etc. ‒ every scene should have a recognisable tone that’s generated by the attitude of the viewpoint character, and that could hold fairly steady for much of the story. A scene that has few tone indicators or that has a mixed tone will either fail to engage readers or leave them confused. The story as a whole, however, should still have an overall tone, a particular feel. Works of fiction, though, can have more than one overriding tone ‒ there may be more than one tone that an author takes toward a work at the same time. For example, a novel can be both humorous and dark, or both sentimental and formal.
In fiction, tone within a chapter, section or scene is created or altered by the way the viewpoint character or narrator interacts with the storyline’s complications/conflicts and other characters, and by the way he/she responds to the events surrounding him/her. Tone can be manipulated by changing what the narrator focuses on and through the narrator’s changing reactions to what is going on in the story as well as by the choice of words used for his/her thoughts, action and dialogue. The tone of a scene, for example, can be affected by manipulation of the sensory elements. The viewpoint character’s perception of and reaction to sensory stimuli helps to create the tone.
The function of tone
Tone determines the lens through which the reader views and comprehends the piece of writing. Tone clues readers into the essence and the purpose of what they’re reading. Authors set the tone of their work to match not only the content of their writing but also to suit the purpose they intend for it to serve. The tone stimulates the reader to read the piece in the manner the author had in mind ‒ as a serious, or light-hearted, or cynical, etc. piece of writing.
In this way, authors make use of tone to demonstrate their attitude toward, or views about, their subject matter, often driving a particular point of view or agenda, such as one sees in social, economic or political commentary. Tone is one of the many methods an author uses to communicate their argument. And, if the author creates a tonal shift in their work, he/she must be mindful that they are doing so. Even a tonal shift should support the argumentative purpose.
Plus, tone lends shape and life to a piece of writing because it creates a mood: it suggests how readers should feel while they are reading it. Authors use tone as a useful tool to shape their readers’ experiences. For instance, if an author wants their readers to feel happy, they will use words and imagery with certain positive connotations to create a bright, cheerful tone.
How is tone conveyed?
Tone is conveyed largely through diction (word choice), syntax (sentence structure and word order), point of view and level of formality, though other writing mechanics, such as punctuation and word styling (e.g. bolding, capitalisation), can help convey it as well. The tone of a piece of writing depends on a confluence of different factors, including:
Diction: the words that the author chooses. A word can have an emotional charge or association that creates a secondary meaning (its connotation), in addition to its dictionary definition (its denotation). In fiction, for example, word choices have to match the character and the moment to create a tone that works in each scene.
Figurative language: is there a lot of metaphor, hyperbole or alliteration? Does the language sound lofty and poetic?
Syntax and ‘sentence sounds’: how words are arranged in a sentence to form its ‘shape’ and how the sentence sounds in readers’ minds when they read it. According to Robert Frost:
In writing, we can’t indicate body language, but we can control how sentences are heard. And it is through our arrangement of words into sentences, one after another, that we can approximate some of the intonations in speech that tells our readers not only information about the world but also how we feel about it, who we are in relationship to it, and who we think our readers are in relationship to us and the message we want to deliver.
Imagery: the pictures that an author creates suggest the tone; descriptive language helps us understand what the author thinks. The descriptive details in the setting, such as colours, time of day, weather, season, sounds and symbols, all suggest feelings, set a tone and create a mood.
The mood: how does the language make you feel, as the reader? This can reveal a lot about the tone of the piece.
Characterisation: tone bestows voice to characters and throws light on their personalities and state of mind, helping readers understand them better. In addition, the various elements of characterisation are a way for the author to send messages, create meaning and set the tone. This is done through the characters’ actions, reactions, thoughts, dialogue, appearance or even what other characters say about them.
Plot: what tone is created by the way the author structures the content and arranges the sequence of events that occur? What feelings are created by the conflict, the climax and the denouement?
Theme: consider the author’s approach and orientation ‒ what attitude comes through in the author’s main point and conclusion?
All these elements work together to determine the tone of a piece of writing. After collecting evidence in all these areas, a reader forms an opinion about the overall attitude or feeling that the author is expressing in these subtle ways.
Final Words
As you examine your own writing, decide whether you are using all the tools available to create a unified tone for the work as a whole and for the various chapters, sections and scenes. The tone (and attitude) used in your writing can be detected and identified by an attentive editor, who can help you figure out how your reader might interpret your writing, and how to refine the tone.
11 Tips for Clear and Concise Writing
This article supplements information provided earlier in the blog ‘Eliminate Clutter and Improve your Writing’. The aim is to improve clarity and comprehension by helping you correct wordiness in your sentences and paragraphs. Concise writing delivers greater impact.
1. Eliminate redundant pairs
When the first word in a pair has roughly the same meaning as the second, choose one. Common examples of redundant pairs include the following: full and complete, each and every, end result, hopes and dreams, whole entire, first and foremost, true and accurate, always and forever, basic and fundamental, worried and concerned, anticipate in advance, joined together.
Example: For each and every toner you purchase, you receive a free ream of paper.
Revision: For every toner you purchase, you receive a free ream of paper.
2. Delete unnecessary qualifiers
Qualifiers are adverbs that show degrees of moderation. We frequently use qualifiers that aren’t actually necessary to express our meaning (such as ‘actually’ in this sentence). They often fail to add meaning, so avoid them. By deleting unnecessary qualifiers (‘filler words’), you can eliminate one or two words per sentence. It may not seem significant, but filler words quickly add up and bloat your prose.
Common qualifiers include the following: actually, like, really, basically, probably, very, definitely, somewhat, kind of, extremely, practically.
3. Use the shortest form of the word or phrase
Why say ‘close proximity’ if you mean ‘near’? Why say ‘conceptualisation’ if you mean ‘concept’? Using a longer form of the word can also be a trap for the unwary; you could be using the wrong word, or you may be using the word incorrectly (i.e. in the wrong context).
Many popular phrases can be replaced with single words. These phrases are commonly used in more formal writing, but they detract from, rather than add to, meaning. For example: ‘The reason for’, ‘due to the fact that’, ‘in light of the fact that’, ‘given the fact that’, and ‘considering the fact that’ can be replaced with ‘because’, ‘since’, or ‘why’.
4. Reduce prepositional phrases
Overuse of prepositional phrases (which begin with words like ‘in’, ’for’, ‘at’, ‘on’, ‘through’, ‘over’, ‘beneath’ and ‘between’ ‒ words that indicate relations between nouns, pronouns, and verbs) can obscure the main subject and action of a sentence. Sometimes prepositional phrases aren’t necessary at all, especially when you use them (instead of an apostrophe + s) to denote possession of an object.
You could eliminate prepositional phrases by using active voice, or by substituting an adverb or a genitive (possessive form) in its place. You could also do so by eliminating nominalisations, or by deleting the prepositional phrase altogether and rephrasing the sentence. For example:
Revise ‘The lawyer responded to the testimony with vehemence’ to ‘The lawyer responded vehemently to the testimony’.
Revise ‘The violin solo was obviously played by a maestro’ to ‘A maestro obviously played the violin solo’.
5. Use the active voice
In an active sentence, the subject (the person or thing doing the action) comes first. In a passive sentence, the order of the words is inverted ‒ the object (the thing that is receiving the action) appears at the start of the sentence, and the subject appears at the end or isn’t included at all. Starting sentences with the subject makes your writing clearer because it’s immediately obvious who or what the sentence is about. This is not to say that every sentence should start with the subject, but it does make for a more powerful sentence.
The passive voice is not a grammatical error, and it can be useful, but writing in the passive voice often leads to using more words than necessary. The passive voice should only be used in situations where there is no causality or agency (the subject isn’t making things happen or making choices).
6. Change negatives to affirmatives
Write affirmative sentences because they are usually clearer than negative sentences and require less words. With negative sentences, your readers have to comprehend the important words in the sentence and negate them. Sentences with more than one negative are even harder to understand.
Example: If you do not have a tertiary qualification in a subject, do not call for an interview for the teaching position.
Revision: Applicants with a tertiary qualification in a subject can call to be interviewed for the teaching position.
You will often have to change certain words when you ‘translate’ a negative sentence.
Example: The politician did not consider the region’s history.
Revision: The politician ignored the region’s history.
7. Replace vague words with specific ones
Vague or abstract words tend to conceal your meaning. On the other hand, specific words convey your meaning exactly, without ambiguity. Simple language is usually clearer; it is more precise and concise than complex language. Identifying ineffective vague description is a matter of deciding whether your writing contains an appropriate level of detail and specificity to convey meaning precisely to your reader.
Example: The clothes we wore were smart, sort of interesting and seemed different to what we see men wearing here.
Revision: He wore a dark tailored suit and a crisp ivory cotton shirt, with a distinctly European flair.
8. Avoid overusing expletives at the beginning of sentences
Expletives are phrases of the form it + be-verb or there + be-verb, i.e. phrases or sentences that begin with ‘There are’, ‘There is’, ‘It is’, or ‘It was’. The verb ‘to be’ is also part of many of these uninspired sentences. Such expressions can be rhetorically effective for emphasis in some situations, but overuse or unnecessary use of expletive phrases creates wordy, boring sentences. In this type of sentence, the word ‘it’ or ‘there’ acts as filler for the real subject of the sentence, and the verb is passive. The result is a sentence that doesn’t engage the reader since the subject and verb have no real meaning.
Example: There are five edicts that should be observed.
Revision: Five edicts should be observed.
9. Keep your sentences to 25-30 words
You should keep sentences short for the same reason you keep paragraphs short: they’re easier to read and understand. It’s almost impossible to keep control of a sentence that’s over about 40 words, and it’s difficult to follow for the reader. When sentences are long, most readers will have to read the sentence at least twice to understand the presented ideas, and they may find it tedious. If you tend to write long sentences, breaking them into two or more will make your thinking clearer and your writing more effective; your readers will appreciate it too.
10. Only explain one idea at a time
A common mistake that authors make is trying to include too much information in their sentences. For clarity, the sentence should only convey one idea at a time. More than that creates complexity and invites confusion. If you try to discuss too many factors together, they are likely to get confused or at least become confusing for the reader. Then you’ll need more (unnecessary) words to explain them.
11. Don’t repeat yourself
Redundancy and repetition tend to go together, and both interrupt the flow of your prose, causing your reader to become distracted and annoyed. Write something once; don’t write the same idea several times, a different way each time. Don’t ramble either; stick to the topic on hand. Nor should you use more words than necessary to express an idea (viz. pleonasm) or excessively describe something.
Pay close attention to what your words signify and what tasks they accomplish. Start thinking about the words you use in terms of the function(s) they perform in the sentence.
Final Thoughts
Concise writing helps you and your readers do more with less and stay focused on the topic. You can communicate your ideas more effectively and keep your readers’ attention longer. Sometimes the easiest way to revise a wordy sentence is to ask yourself “What do I really mean here?” and then write a new sentence; this approach can be more efficient than just tinkering with your existing sentence.
If you need help perfecting your writing, please contact Renell at renellj@proofperfect.co.nz
or M: 029 1230 158.
17 Online Resources to Help you Improve your English
Credible and Effective Online Resources
Learning English grammar, punctuation, spelling and vocabulary is not an easy task. Whether you want to improve your English so you can write more effectively, converse with greater clarity and accuracy, or read with deeper comprehension, here are a few websites you may wish to visit. Note that some refer to North American English grammar and language usage, while others relate to British English.
This site provides a wide range of online resources. With short, clear grammar rules and a range of exercises, it is a great site for practising your English grammar skills. It is a comprehensive site that covers every aspect of reading, writing and speaking British English. Probably one of the very best sites available.
A site loaded with tools to help you learn fundamental English through fun activities. This too, is one of the best websites when it comes to learning British English. It is the website of Cambridge Assessment English (CAE), which is part of the University of Cambridge. CAE provides the world’s leading range of qualifications and tests for learners and teachers of English.
Whether you are a beginner learning the basics or an advanced learner trying to perfect the more complex aspects of American English grammar, this site is excellent with a great range of guides and videos. It is thorough and updated regularly. You can also download lessons or do online grammar practise sessions.
Grammar Girl is both a blog and podcast that provides short, friendly tips to improve the grammar in your writing. Grammar Girl (also known as Mignon Fogarty) makes learning grammar fun and simple with memory tricks. This makes it easier to remember and use difficult grammar rules.
English Club has resources for grammar lessons, pronunciation, vocabulary, writing and many other topics. Great for beginner to intermediate levels. Some lessons have quizzes, and others have special tips that explain commonly misunderstood facts about each topic.
This site provides blog-like articles that present straightforward advice on some of the trickier points of English grammar.
One of the best sites for improving your American English grammar and punctuation. The site covers an astonishing range of topics and is highly regarded, being used by everyday people, students and academics.
A grammar website and blog written by an English language teacher. Select your grammar focus, read a description and examples, and then practise with online exercises.
This site has collected many rules, facts and tips on every possible grammar topic you can imagine. Explanations are written in a blog-like way. It’s an excellent resource for more advanced learners and is directed at native English speakers who want to improve their grammar. Therefore, the tips might be a bit overwhelming for beginner/intermediate learners.
English Grammar 101 is structured like a grammar textbook. Each easy-to-understand lesson (or chapter) only covers one topic at a time, and it is followed by an online exercise section to test your understanding of the topic.
This site specialises in English as a Second Language (ESL) and presents a large collection of tools and resources for students, teachers, learners and academics, covering the full spectrum of ESL, EFL, ESOL, and EAP subject areas.
Another site where you can select a topic, read a short description of the rules and then practise with a lot of activities. It is suitable for leaning basic English at a beginner’s level.
Grammar Bytes has mini grammar lessons and exercises presented in a friendly and even entertaining way. Interactive exercises let you test your skills, and they contain easy-to-understand explanations with the correct answers. The site also posts a daily grammar workout on its Twitter account. Its focus is on American English.
Education First offers a collection of free English learning resources. Its grammar guide is well structured and is a good starting place to learn how to use the parts of speech. The rules themselves are short and example sentences are used to show how English grammar works.
Considered to be one of the best websites for learning English as a second language. The site utilises videos and encourages you to learn through online conversations and interaction. Learning is through a four-step, web-based process.
This popular and comprehensive website presents a variety of superb learning exercises and incorporates videos, tests, vocabulary primers, crosswords, etc. It covers everything ‒ business English, conversational English, English for teachers, and so on.
While not structured very well, English Page has some of the best American English grammar exercises you’ll find online. The exercises require you to write the answers, so you apply what you’ve learned. There’s an excellent section with grammar rules as well, with many sample sentences.
Final Words
I hope you find these sites helpful as you learn, practise, improve and perfect your English. It is important to incorporate the grammar, vocabulary and spelling you are learning into all four language skills: reading, writing, listening and speaking.
Read as much well-written English as possible, listen to good-quality English broadcasts, and watch the better-type of English-language TV shows and movies (those that do not rely on slang or vulgarity) to immerse yourself in the language. And, try to engage in conversations with people who speak the type of English you aspire to.
If you need assistance with fine-tuning and polishing your written English, contact Renell on +64 29 1230 158 or renellj@proofperfect.co.nz
Does your Novel need an Epilogue?
What is an Epilogue?
In fiction writing, an epilogue is a literary device that functions as a supplemental, but separate, part of the main story; it is a sort of commentary that enhances the story. It appears after the main narrative, i.e. at the end of a story, and it is separate from the final chapter.
An epilogue is often used to reveal the fates of the characters in a story, or to provide important information that wasn’t covered in the climax, falling action or denouement parts of the novel, or to indicate the aftermath and consequences of events in the story.
You need a clear reason for writing an epilogue. It should not be used simply to wrap up any loose ends, something which you should have done towards the end of your main narrative. Without a good reason for including an epilogue, readers will see it as a clumsy attempt to make up for poor plot structure or a weak ending to your story.
It’s usually better to keep an epilogue rather brief so the reader does not get the sense that a whole new story is starting. If the epilogue is especially short, it may even be in italics.
How it Differs from an Afterword
An afterword is typically written by someone other than the author and describes how the book came into being. In an afterword, the author or a third party speaks to the readers directly.
An epilogue is always set at some point in the future after the main events of the story have taken place, and the writer speaks to the readers indirectly, through the point of view of a different character.
In this regard, decide on a point of view from which to write the epilogue. Keep it consistent with the rest of the novel and maintain the same vantage point as the manuscript. For example, if the story was written in the first person, then avoid writing the epilogue in the third person.
What does a Good Epilogue do?
Only write an epilogue if you absolutely must — don’t use it in place of a solid and satisfying ending. The epilogue should only contain information that is critical to the main story, supplementing a reader’s understanding of what has transpired and providing a strong resolution.
Why include an Epilogue?
There are various reasons why you might include an epilogue in your book:
- To add to the development of character by telling readers what happened to them after the story has ended. If you’ve written a compelling story, readers will be invested in your characters and their fates. Suggesting the future for the protagonist and other characters is an important consideration in series fiction or if you’re planning a sequel.
- To share a core character or narrator’s final reflections. It gives you a chance to show how the events of the entire story impacted the characters — the lessons they learned, and how they have grown. An epilogue that has characters reflecting on prior events, having them experience the past from a new vantage point, may be emotionally satisfying for the reader.
- To bring closure, covering any loose ends of your story and resolving those issues that were not addressed in the climax, falling action or denouement. While all major issues should have been resolved within the main narrative, it is possible that other, less important ones, remain outstanding. Clarifying or resolving these may bring the reader some satisfaction.
- To wrap up story events after a traumatic or violent climax. This is an especially important technique when the ending is abrupt or surprising or even ambiguous. It diffuses tension and helps the reader process the ending of the story. If your story’s ending raises more questions than it answers, you will either need to rewrite it or create an epilogue to resolve the problem.
- To make the story seem realistic. For example, the epilogue can be written from the POV of one of the characters to explain how matters unfolded after the events related in the story. Or, if the ending of your story was dramatic, even traumatic, the epilogue can assure readers that the protagonist has survived or healed. The epilogue can also be an opportunity to take a different perspective on the characters and their world, which might seem incongruous within the main story.
- To reiterate the importance of what the story is trying to say. An epilogue can be a good way to remind readers of the central themes and lessons of your story, and to highlight the consequences and results of events in the story. Since an epilogue is its own standalone short section, you can shape the structure to focus on some of the things you want readers to take away with them. In this way, the author can use the epilogue to direct the reader towards a particular interpretation of the story.
- To hint at a coming sequel or the next instalment of a story. If you are setting up the possibility of a sequel or a series of novels, an epilogue is a good way to let readers know they haven’t heard the last of these characters. Hinting at events that are already underfoot in an epilogue is an effective way to keep readers intrigued and on the lookout for your next instalment. Some epilogues do more: they introduce a twist, or a new, suspenseful development related to the main story arc to make readers keen to obtain the next part of the story.
- To foreclose the possibility of a sequel. Proving the reader with an ‘I want you to know this is the absolute ending’ as a conclusion in the epilogue, communicates the author’s intent; it does not add something relevant to the story arc.
Final Words
When done well, an epilogue can have a big impact on readers, providing a sense of closure in a way that a final chapter sometimes cannot, or does not, do. But remember that not all issues need resolving to complete a story ‒ in some instances it may even detract from the reader’s satisfaction to do so. The best books engage the reader’s imagination in some way.
An epilogue is an effective way to give readers an idea of what happened after the story ended. The tricky part, however, is not to get sucked into the trap of making an epilogue the actual end of the story. If the information is crucial to the story, it shouldn’t be in an epilogue, it should be in the final chapter.
It’s also worth noting that many readers admit to skipping the front- and/or end matter of a book, so ensure there is nothing vital to the story included in the epilogue.
The Oft-Abused Prologue: When & How to Write it
What Is a Prologue?
A prologue is a piece of writing found at the beginning of a literary work, before the first chapter and separate from the main story. Its purpose is to introduce important information that has a connection to the main story, but whose relevance is not immediately obvious. A good prologue contains information that is — or will be — important to understanding the plot.
It should not be confused with other front matter elements, such as a preface or an introduction:
A preface gives the reader a look at how the book came to be. It explains the goal of the book, its development, and acknowledges the parties who contributed to the book. It’s mostly used in non-fiction, sometimes in fiction.
An introduction deals specifically with the subject of the book. It might offer supplemental information or explain the perspective of the writer(s).
While a preface doesn’t typically contain information vital to the reader’s understanding of the book, an introduction usually does. It’s mostly used in non-fiction.
Functions of a Prologue
A good prologue performs one of many functions in a story:
- Foreshadowing events to come, thereby creating suspense for the reader and get them asking questions (and eagerly reading on). This includes offering critical information the reader couldn’t otherwise glean from the plot. The prologue could even offer glimpses of the future.
- Providing background or history on the central theme or main events, describing what took place before the beginning of your story. These earlier events then go on to significantly impact the storyline going forward. The writer now has a quick, economic and convenient way of providing important background information without the need of flashbacks, dialogue, or memories that interrupt the flow later on in the book.
- Showcasing the ‘inciting incident’, the event that thrusts the main character into the heart of the story, and sets off a chain of events, even if they don’t yet know it. Many such incidents take place during the opening chapters of a story, but some occur before the story begins — often without the main character’s knowledge. When the latter is the case, a prologue that gives readers a glimpse of the inciting incident can be a great way to pique their interest and, perhaps, create dramatic irony.
- Establishing a point of view (POV), either the main character’s or another character’s, one who is privy to the tale. This function works well when a particular character’s insight is only needed once and provides a foundation for the story. A ‘different POV’ style of prologue describes a certain event from a point-of-view different to that of the main characters of the story. This event may occur in the same timeframe as the plot or years before or after. Its relevance may be made clear early in the novel or towards to end. However, it must have relevance and affect the plot substantially in some way. A ‘different POV’ prologue should be written in the third-person, even if the novel is in the first-person.
- Setting the tone for the rest of the story and to introduce a philosophy, belief system, cultural environment, milieu, etc. that is important to the plot/setting. Most editors, though, would recommend that if you’re simply including a prologue to set the tone/mood or establish the world of the story, consider doing so in Chapter One instead. A prologue needs to somehow propel or impact your main plot: its first duty is to supply information that is or will be vital to the understanding of the plot. If you solely want to ‘create atmosphere’, write an epigraph rather than a prologue. The mood of your novel needs to be made clear in Chapter One anyway, so you may as well do it properly within the novel.
- Hooking the reader into the action right away, having them asks questions relevant to the central plot — and therefore eager to learn those answers in the opening chapters. Once again, most editors would recommend not throwing the readers right into the middle of an action scene simply to hook them; it can be confusing, even disorienting. Think about developing the scene fully within the rich context of a chapter instead.
- Creating dramatic irony, a form of suspense that occurs when readers are privy to valuable knowledge that the main characters do not have. Often an antagonist is introduced in this style of prologue.
- Introducing the antagonist — providing background motives that either humanises the character or exhibits their evil intentions. This angle can be handy if the protagonist doesn’t meet the antagonist until later on in the book.
- Introducing the protagonist: The ‘future protagonist’ prologue shows the hero some time after the main part of the plot has taken place, and it is written in the same point-of-view and style as the rest of the novel. The ‘past protagonist’ prologue is generally used when the protagonist has a defining moment in their past which must be known to the reader, in order for the reader to understand this character.
When to Use a Prologue
The first question you need to ask is: “Does my novel need a prologue?”
A prologue is used when ‒
- Material that you want to include in the opening is out of time sequence with the rest of the story. Or, the scene occurs in a very different place or setting to events in the main story. In either instance, the event that is related in the prologue then shapes or has an impact on the rest of the story.
- It is important for certain information to be revealed upfront and it can’t be revealed throughout the story in smaller trickles and still be as impactful.
- The character’s POV does not come up again later in the story (e.g. the murder victim), or if it does, it would be confusing for the reader if it had not been included earlier, in the prologue.
Don’t use the prologue as an opportunity for a massive information dump ‒ readers will switch off and become bored or restless. The key is to create a balance between revealing information and maintaining, even stimulating, interest.
Final Words
To make sure your prologue works well, you can put it through a simple two-step test: First, try to leave it out and see if anything important is missing, and second, try to change its title to ‘Chapter One, and check if the plot integrity is damaged. If you’ve answered both questions with a yes, then your prologue is doing a good job.
The prologue should always be an integral part of your novel, written in the same tone/mood and style. Otherwise, it’s a personal preface rather than an opening chapter. Also, keep it interesting and keep it brief: your prologue shouldn’t be longer than your average chapter length. A prologue should read exactly as if you were writing a short story without a true ending — your prologue should leave the reader questioning and curious.
Write an Effective Blurb for a Non-Fiction Book
What is a book blurb?
A blurb is the copy/text that appears on the back cover of a book. Your back-cover blurb is the second thing a potential buyer looks at after your front cover. You can write a ‘description blurb’ your book yourself (preferably in the third person) or have a ‘review blurb’ written by someone else in which praises for your book are mentioned.
Purpose
A strong, insightful blurb is one of the most important and powerful selling tools for your book because it serves as your sales pitch. Once your book’s title and cover have drawn the reader in, the blurb is what is going to make the difference between a missed opportunity and a sale. You have one shot at introducing your book to your reader ‒ make it count.
Many authors write the blurb as an afterthought, even though it is the single most important piece of writing you will do on your book! While the cover design creates interest, even intrigue, the blurb is what will convince readers to buy your book. A book blurb is there to entice a purchase, not demonstrate your writing skills; therefore, it should be short and to the point.
What makes a good book blurb?
Blurbs for non-fiction books are very different to those for fiction, in that they convey a message and the benefits the reader will receive from reading the book.
A non-fiction book blurb should give a quick indication of the credentials of the author, which readers it is written for and why they need it. A fiction book blurb, on the other hand, should convey atmosphere, specify its genre, and indicate what kind of book it is (mass-market or literary fiction). Quotes are extremely valuable to both fiction and non-fiction blurbs as they accurately describe the expectations the reader should have of the content.
It’s very important to match the words to the product. Do not make a romantic novel sound like classical literature: you will put off both potential markets. Try to use your genre keywords too – they’re great for SEO ‘findability’ and to help classify your book on the shelves.
10 Book Blurb Essentials
Blurbs for non-fiction books need to address the fact that the reader has turned to you, the author, for information rather than entertainment. Instead of creating suspense or drama in the blurb, you’ll want to reveal a little more about the content and its significance. Here’s how:
1. Determine your target market
Indicate who the book is for. This could be phrased as ‘For people who want…’, or it could describe the primary problem your target market has. Followed by what they’ll get from the content, or how you will help them solve the problem and why they should make buy your book and read it now. Keep this concise.
Its highly likely that any subject you’ve written about has already been covered by other authors, so you’ll want to look at similar books and their blurbs. Where does your book fit in? What’s unique about you? What’s your story? How do you differentiate your book? Perhaps you can identify a niche market or highlight a unique perspective that you bring to the content.
Is there a hook you can use that will attract readers in a particular niche market? Naturally, others will read (and hopefully) love your book too. But the readers who will feel that you really ‘get them’ will be those who can sympathise, empathise, admire or identify with you. Your blurb will persuade them to pick up your book, read it and recommend it to others ‒ if it lives up to expectations.
2. Make your opening line count
First impressions count. And when writing a blurb, your opening line is your first impression. Short, pithy, surprising sentences or valuable information will grab the reader’s attention. And it’s not a bad idea to lead with the most outrageous claim, alarming insight, startling reveal, etc. that you have. It’s not suggesting you make something up or be deceptive, but a clever use of words to create a need-to-know urgency in your reader never hurts.
3. Sell the benefits
Why should someone read your book? What’s in it for them? What will they learn? How will it change them? These are just some of the questions that you can answer by stating the benefits of reading your book. For the most part, non-fiction is about learning, teaching and training to varying degrees. Approach the copy of your back-cover blurb with the mindset of ‘what’s in it for the reader’.
You could structure sentences along the lines of, ‘What you’ll learn when you read this book:’ or ‘When you’ve read this book, you will know/understand/be able to:’ then follow this with three to five bullet points of benefits of the content. This is your chance to make your promises about the value the book will deliver and paraphrase the best bits from your Table of Contents to entice the reader.
4. Showcase your knowledge
Offer some of your insight and learnings in your blurb. Don’t give it all away, but you do need to show your authority and relevant experience to build credibility. Demonstrate that you know something valuable which will help your readers. Mention something significant about the content that makes the book worth picking up, promising that there will be more of that useful information inside.
5. Write in your own voice
This is paramount. Your blurb should be written in the same voice as your book. It might sound obvious, but so many writers don’t do this. A potential reader looks at the blurb the same way they would look at the book itself. In a non-fiction book, you are selling your knowledge, your experience, your writing and yourself, so if the blurb doesn’t represent the typical language you use in your book, the reader will feel a disconnect. Besides, it will only make your words more authentic and impactful.
6. Keep it short
Most blurbs are only between 100 and 150 words long, excluding the author biography. Keep your blurb within these limits if you want it to make an impact. Your last sentence should wrap it up – essentially coming full circle back to the first sentence. You can use bullet points and questions. The book blurb should arouse curiosity, rather than provide answers. You want them to think ‘That’s what I need to know!’ or ‘That sounds just like me …’
7. Use a cliffhanger
The aim of your blurb is to leave readers curious and wanting more ‒ so much so that they would actually buy the book. For non-fiction books, your cliffhanger should promise a strategy or a solution to address a problem the reader has, or a situation they want to understand, or information that they are seeking, and so on.
8. Get testimonials or endorsements
Endorsements are a powerful way for you and your book to have credibility and ‘social proof’, making your book more appealing to potential buyers. Powerful endorsements or testimonials from notable, credible people in your related field is the goal.
The praise on your book cover should make it very clear, in one brief sentence (include a maximum of three short quotes), why someone should read your book. The quote should be from someone whose name the reader recognises or whose title shows they know what they’re talking about ‒ if not, it might be ineffective. Acquiring testimonials and endorsements is something you’ll need to start working on early, often before you’ve finished writing your book.
9. Author biography
Keep this short and focused on why you, the author, are uniquely qualified to write this book and what motivated you to do it. Three sentences should cover it (you can put a longer Author Biography inside your book). List your key credentials and qualifications but don’t write a CV or present irrelevant details – align this with the tone and subject matter of the content. Readers want to know the person offering the information they’re spending their time and money on, is genuine.
10. Author photo
A professionally photographed headshot of you adds character and illustration to all the words on your back cover; it also helps your readers connect with you. It can be in colour or black and white, but should show you looking friendly, likeable, approachable and trustworthy.
Final Words
Make sure these elements are concise and well laid out (a back cover that is covered in text with not enough ‘white space’ is unappealing to the reader) and your back cover will be doing a great job selling your non-fiction book. Your book blurb can also be used in pitch letters to reviewers and journalists, and as background information for anyone wishing to interview you about your book. The book blurb is an important communication aid when promoting your book, so invest plenty of time and effort to ensure you get it right.
Using Persuasive Writing in Everyday Business
What is Persuasive Writing?
Persuasion is the art of making an offer that others can’t refuse. Persuasive writing uses words to convince the reader to listen to what you have to say and to act in a certain way ‒ it has to sway your reader intellectually and emotionally.
We all need to use it in our everyday business writing. Great business writers use persuasive writing in advertising materials, social media marketing, proposals, articles, newsletters, blog posts, memos, emails, requests for meetings, speeches and reports. In each situation, your goal is to persuade your readers that what you have to say is relevant and valuable and that it is in their best interest to take the action you have requested.
3 Pillars of Persuasive Writing
1. Be credible
By appealing to credibility, writers make their claims more believable. The writer builds on his or her credibility by writing with confidence, clarity and accuracy. You and your business will be more credible if there are no errors in your written material, as well as no errors in the subject matter.
Incorporate some personal work-related information and some comments about your customers’ experiences with your business in your writing to bolster your credibility. You can support the validity of your customers’ feedback with testimonials and personal recommendations.
2. Be logical
By appealing to logic, writers persuade their readers through coherent arguments. A successful appeal to the reader’s reasoning requires tangible evidence, e.g., a quote from a reliable source, a case study, or a testimonial. You appeal to the rationality of your reader, using your evidence to persuade the reader to agree with you, convincing them that your argument is viable and likely to result in the obtainment of benefits and goals.
3. Appeal to emotions
By appealing to emotions, writers persuade by evoking feelings and swaying emotions rather than by using valid logic. If you judge a mood, or correctly address feelings about the subject, you can win over a reader. Trigger positive emotions by highlighting desirable benefits and outcomes, and negative emotions by indicating what might occur if your products and/or services are not used.
This is possibly the most important of the appeals but the most frequently abused. Be careful not to appeal to the prejudices of readers instead of offering a fair and sober assessment of a situation, product or service.
Most persuasive writing techniques use all three appeals.
10 Techniques used in Persuasive Writing
1. Focus on the reader
‘It’s all about you’ is the most important technique used in persuasive writing. This technique, which produces goodwill and favourably influences people, is crucial in business writing. You must emphasise the reader’s importance and put their interests first.
If you want to get your point of view across, convey information or persuade readers, focus on them and see things from their perspective. Adapt what and how you write in terms of their interests, problems, needs and preferences. Present your products and services in light of what’s important to the readers rather than yourself, and what your business can do to benefit them.
2. Have clear goals
Answer the following questions to help you select the right content, format, tone and structure for your writing:
- What is important, original or exciting about what you want to convey?
- Who do you want to read this?
- What action are you trying to inspire?
- How will it benefit your readers?
- Where will it be read? On a website, in print, in an email?
3. Warmth
You can make all sorts of mistakes in your writing and the messages you want to get across yet still leave your readers with a good feeling ‒ if you can convey the intangible quality of personal warmth. Warmth is more difficult to convey in writing than it is in verbal communication.
You should demonstrate concern for the reader’s circumstances, show interest in their attitudes and values, and be honest and genuine about the ways in which your products and/or services are going to be helpful to them. Make the reader feel comfortable and confident in dealing with you.
4. Engagement
The first paragraph of your writing must be well crafted to engage the reader right from the start. It should grab the reader’s attention, provide an overview of the whole story, and set the tone of what they are about to read. Provide a compelling reason for the reader to continue reading.
Concentrate on three key messages – It is tempting to cover a lot of material in your writing as you want to provide the reader with as much information as possible. But you should focus on key messages you want the reader to take away and how you want them to feel after reading the material.
5. Focus on benefits
When it comes to writing persuasively, make the case for why and how the features of your products and/or services lead to benefits, and how they can help the reader address a particular problem or need. Show and tell the reader why they are making the correct decision in choosing your products and/or services rather than any other.
Write your material not only to ‘sell with benefits’ but also to create a compelling vision of a desired future state that will attract and please the reader if they do business with you. Also consider what your readers’ questions might be and have the answers ready to work into your document.
6. Parallel experience
One way of touching the right spots with your reader is to draw on a parallel situation in your own experience, creating a sense of insight and empathy. Build your writing around this experience or use what you have learned as a basis for your writing. By developing a sympathetic bond between yourself and your reader, you enhance the person-to-person connection and help your reader to become more open to what you are saying.
7. Good manners
If you want to persuade your reader, you must show impeccable manners. In other words, be nice, be polite and be truthful. If you are rude or pushy, your reader will shut down to your ‘marketing argument’ and turn elsewhere. When in doubt, put yourself in their shoes and ask, “How would I feel if this was directed at me? Would I be offended, or would I be open to listening to more?”
8. Tone
The tone of your writing goes beyond the content of your words. It offers the reader an overall feeling, an indication of your intention and attitude toward them and the subject you are talking about. The general tone of your message will depend on what is being covered and how you want to convey your message, but a useful guideline is to stay positive and approachable.
Suggest to your reader that you are interested in their problems and in solving them. A good tone is ruined by using slang, harsh words, sloppy phrases, and a lack of respect for your readers.
9. Use the right structure
Choose a structure that complements what you have to say and the persuasive technique you have chosen. Plan the structure of your writing to persuade effectively ‒ don’t try to construct an argument on the fly. There are several ways to structure a document and argument, such as:
- The ‘inverted pyramid’ in which the most important information is presented first.
- A profile or case study which highlights the significance of a single experience.
- The traditional pyramid structure which leads the reader gently to a persuasive conclusion.
10. Have a strong finish
The closing paragraph is the second most important thing you’ll write, after the opening paragraph. It should encapsulate and reiterate your central idea and explicitly state what action you want your reader to take. Avoid introducing a new idea when you’re writing the conclusion. Be sure to leave a memorable impression with your final words.
Final words
Persuading isn’t about manipulation or pushy sales tactics; it’s about getting buy-in for your offer. If you need assistance fine-tuning your business documents, please call Renell for an appointment.
Organising your Book into Chapters & Sections
Organising your Written Material
If you are writing a novel for the first time, you’ll need to organise the content into divisions of one kind or another. The key is that the structure should fit the story, not the other way around. Ideally, the divisions emerge organically and intrinsically from the story.
The type of division we are most familiar with is chapters ‒ they are a convenient method of dividing material by topic, chronology, location or by any other means you may use to construct your book and help readers to mentally move through it. A novel is usually divided into chapters by plot development, with each chapter contributing to the overall story. You can write chapter by chapter chronologically, or work on several chapters at once and arrange them later.
Chapter Length
There’s no set rule for chapter length. If you find that some are long, while others are short, don’t be overly concerned as it’s not a flaw. Your chapters do not need to all be the same length. You should, however, have an average or standard chapter length in mind to help you manage the pacing of your novel (more about that next). Also try to avoid a dramatic and sudden variation in chapter length as readers can find this distracting, even jarring.
Chapter length and pacing interact. Varying the length of chapters can become an intentional part of your storytelling, quickening the pace or slowing it down, creating suspense or anticipation. You can also weave shorter and longer chapters together to create a steady and predictable pace.
Chapter Breaks
Novels have many styles of chapter breaks. Some have dozens of short chapters, some have a few huge chapters, and some have no chapters at all. In books the chapters are occasionally grouped into larger ‘parts’ or even ‘books’ (often called ‘modules’ or ‘units’ in technical books and textbooks).
Chapter breaks provide some closure as the story unfolds but also allow for a pause: they ‘reset’ the story, giving the reader a rest so that they can read the next chapter with a fresh view. Chapters also keep a novel interesting and engaging; they provide a structured way for you to switch between characters, time periods, locations, etc.
The division of a written work into chapters, however, is probably one of the things in writing that has least rules of all. A chapter break tells the reader to mentally prepare for some sort of shift; as such they should occur when a major change of one kind or another happens. Some points at which breaks are traditionally made or ways to define breaks include:
- Change of site/location ‒ the place or setting in which the action is taking place changes.
- Change in POV character ‒ someone different starts relating the narrative.
- Change in time/chronology ‒ the time in which the action takes places changes significantly.
- Change in auxiliary characters ‒ the people the narrator or protagonist is interacting with changes.
- A natural pause ‒ e.g. a point at which you’ve come to the end of a major event in your storyline or at which you want to introduce one or more of the ‘changes’ mentioned above.
Sections (aka Scenes)
The next logical way to divide your content is to subdivide the chapters, and this is done with sections (aka scenes) which may or may not have their own subtitles. Your scenes control your chapters. If your chapters are variable in length, it’s because your scenes are variable in length. Create sections within the chapter when the subject changes somewhat but you are still discussing a particular aspect of a larger subject that the chapter covers. Use the same sort of criteria for your section breaks as you would for the chapter breaks discussed above.
If you want to create a break in the flow of the chapter’s text but don’t need to announce a new subject or prefer not to use a subtitle, you can create a text break with a type ornament (e.g. == oOo == or ~ ~ ~ ~) and some additional space between paragraphs. Using a few asterisks is also common, and in some books, just an extra-wide line space is used.
When and Where to place the Chapter Breaks?
The actual length of any given chapter or section of the story isn’t that important ‒ as long as the point where the break occurs make sense; some chapters or sections may be longer or shorter and they may extend or shorten as the narrative progresses.
The chapter break should be placed strategically. If, while designing your outline, the thought of separating your plot into chapters is daunting, then don’t make chapter break decisions yet. Write a first draft of the whole novel, then return to the beginning and place your chapter breaks with intention during your rewrite. This allows you to assign each chapter a purpose.
During the first draft, most writers are more concerned about getting their thoughts onto paper than about chapter structure. If you lock your narrative into chapters too early in the writing process, you might stifle your creativity. Besides, chances are high that whatever you write in your first draft will get moved around, pulled apart, divided, and added to other chapters or sections, if not discarded en masse.
Final Thoughts
The ‘anatomy’ of your novel, which includes its technical and structural elements, is important and should not be neglected. The reader’s level of engagement is affected by the way you divide your novel into chapters. The most important thing is that at the end of each chapter the reader should be keen to pick up the book and start the next chapter. Make the reader want to turn the next page.
A dramatic cliffhanger is not suitable for every chapter (although effective) as it can feel contrived, but tension of some kind is essential. Even small things can serve as a ‘hook’ to draw readers into the next chapter. Once you are well into your writing, you will develop a sense of where it feels natural to end a chapter and start a new one. If you find this is still a struggle for you, the problem might be with the narrative itself rather than your division of it. Then you might need some advice from an editor!
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